雅思復(fù)議申請(qǐng)全攻略之二：可復(fù)議作文

　　金老師分析：

　　這個(gè)題目結(jié)尾問同意不同意，在開頭段回應(yīng)任務(wù)的時(shí)候，一定會(huì)清楚表明你的同意或不同意的意向，來完成任務(wù)回應(yīng)的初步評(píng)分!當(dāng)然，即使是這樣的題目，你也可以選擇不同意題目的說法，然后寫等分，說兩者都重要!

　　例如：我不同意這一說法。通過閱讀、電影和高科技的網(wǎng)絡(luò)了解世界固然是經(jīng)濟(jì)、方便的，但某種程度上，旅行可以帶來只管的感受和體驗(yàn)，驗(yàn)證我們?cè)跁匣蚧ヂ?lián)網(wǎng)上看到的。

　　當(dāng)然，這個(gè)題目也可以寫偏分，說不同意!

　　例如：我不同意題目中的觀點(diǎn)。盡管書本和互聯(lián)網(wǎng)的信息可以讓我們了解外面的世界。但是那些都是別人眼中的世界!旅行可以不僅僅讓我們?nèi)ヲ?yàn)證這些我們讀到的知識(shí)，還讓我們有自己的認(rèn)知，第一手的經(jīng)驗(yàn)，看到更多的不同和從多角度來體驗(yàn)、感受!所以不是不必要!

　　但無論怎么寫，切題是評(píng)分關(guān)鍵!大多數(shù)同學(xué)采取等分，比較好寫!那么就要寫清楚旅行的優(yōu)勢(shì)和讀書、互聯(lián)網(wǎng)的優(yōu)勢(shì)，在了解世界學(xué)習(xí)文化方面!

　　以上是正常對(duì)本文的任務(wù)回應(yīng)的一個(gè)建。那么有很多考生文章寫走題了，也就是沒有任務(wù)回應(yīng)，不回答文章的問題，邏輯論述不切題!于是，就算詞句尚可，也不能拿到6分就6分以上。

　　復(fù)議作文題目

　　“It is not necessary for people to travel and learn about the culture of the other. We can learn the other culture from books, films and Internet. Do you agree or disagree with this opinion?”

　　文章點(diǎn)評(píng)

　　Nowadays, with the exponential growth rate of traveling between different places, a heated debate is ignited. Some people claim that it is essential for them to learn other cultures through tours, while others suppose that books, films and Internet have offered enough materials for them to learn cultures. However, I do not judge the two sides as ambivalent.

　　開頭段倒是還算清晰!自己的立場(chǎng)也基本明了!

　　It is undeniable that books, films and Internet do bring a large sum of information and knowledge about cultures from all of the world. Sometimes pictures and videos with words demonstration can make people better understand other cultures than the way of traveling and these knowledge can be even more specific and in detail. Also, it is much more convenient and easier for people to acquaint different cultures by means of record material than going traveling.

　　拓展實(shí)在較弱。觀點(diǎn)的框架有，但內(nèi)部可以具體論述的看不到!在任務(wù)回應(yīng)和邏輯上評(píng)分不會(huì)太好!

　　However, reaching the above mentioned conclusion does not mean that we should turn a blind eye to the benefits of traveling. Actually, it is significant for people to feel the local cultural atmosphere when learning a new culture and this kind of feeling can never be replaced by any other means. Furthermore, food, as one kind of culture, can never be tasted though books, films or Internet, since food is intangible.

　　整體文章寫得比較空!都是一些泛泛而談的句子!沒有實(shí)際的論述!

　　In conclusion, both traveling and the means of books, films and Internet are good way of learning cultures.

　　金老師點(diǎn)評(píng)：

　　如果這基本還原了文章，那么這樣相對(duì)空洞的論述在第一、第二評(píng)分項(xiàng)上沖不到6分。刻意增加了用詞的難度，這還是可以的，是文章的亮點(diǎn)!但句式的難度一般!

　　文章言之無物后，即使詞句不錯(cuò)，也不太能引起考官的注意和較好評(píng)分!這是雅思寫作的關(guān)鍵!一定要寫出東西!

　　故而我只給了5.5，到6的把握不是太大，只有最多一半可能!

　　本文作者：偏鋒出國(公眾號(hào)：偏鋒出國)

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